Peer Review Paper 3

Since I was absent the day we did the peer review in class, a peer and myself chose to do the peer review outside of class on our own time. Andrew suggested that I should elaborate a little more on the advertisement itself and the different images that were used in the image. According to him, I should have used less outside information in the process of constructing my paper. He liked how I did incorporate unique facts about the ad itself and how I shed some light on the anti ad and the process the fast food actually undergoes. 

I definitely enjoyed reading Andrew's paper. He used a great variety of vivid diction. I suggested that he should change some of the phrasings in his paper since he did actually repeat himself on two occasions. Other than that, I believed that his paper was pretty well constructed up to that point.

Gangnam Style

horses, drinking ,playground, thrill, snow, sauna, dancing, party bus, on boat, parking garage and subway.

Secret

This activity let me talk about a secret which I wouldn't talk to anyone else about because I feel like others would judge me for it, while in the context of this activity people might just get a good laugh out of it. My audience for this is pretty much anyone that is interested in the secret, people that are bored and just want to look at things like this or people who want to get a laugh out of the misfortunes of others. I looked through a magazine at first just to inspire myself and I found an image of an object which relates to my secret. I cut out that specific item, glued it on the card and wrote some words, to be more exact: my secret.  My secret gave the item more meaning because it explained the picture I used. Even though this might not be my deepest darkest secret, I believe that the combination of the image and my wording might let people understand what this is about.

Class Blog 11/14/12

Class Blog

During class today Ms. Lang handed back our first drafts of paper #3 about the anti ad that we were supposed to create. She gave us some time to look over the corrections and comments that she made before we proceeded to talk about other class-related issues. Also, Ms. Lang told us when all the revisions of paper one, two and three would be due.

Revisions:

Paper 1 - Wednesday 11/21/12
Paper 2 - Friday 11/30/12
Paper 3 - no revision option

Ms. Lang went over some common problems she found in our drafts of paper #3. The main issues were the fact that a lot of students claimed that "people think they become famous if they use the product" and the students' inability to use internal citations.

How to cite something in the text:

-book or magazine: if it is just one sentence: (last name of author, pg#)
                               if it is a whole paraphrased paragraph: (last name)
-website: (last name)

Some important things that we should include in our papers are our audiences and where our ad originally came from. That information is essential to construct our papers. 1/3 of our paper should focus on how we constructed and modified this ad for a specific audience. Because some students are not too great with computers, we may construct our ads without the use of any computer graphics.


After we talked about the paper, we discussed the reading on page 192. The main focus of that reading was about perspectives about other people without knowing their background or context.

Ms. Lang wrote down the following things on the board:
-perspective of the other person
-how do you know?
-stereotypes of black men
      -shock/curiosity
      -fear
      -understanding stereotype
            -ashamed
-take precautions

How the reading was constructed:
-naive tone
-distinct voice: since he incorporates his background into his present experiences, he gives it a very personal touch
-genuine/honest
-reflective

What affects the public sphere:
-teachers
-figures of authority
-people who stand out/ people that don't stick to the norms of our society


We will have an option to publish our anti ads!

We will create magazines with our ads in them with ads with similar audiences.



FOR FRIDAY: BRING A PAIR OF SCISSORS AND A MAGAZINE