I definitely enjoyed reading Andrew's paper. He used a great variety of vivid diction. I suggested that he should change some of the phrasings in his paper since he did actually repeat himself on two occasions. Other than that, I believed that his paper was pretty well constructed up to that point.
Thursday, November 29, 2012
Peer Review Paper 3
Since I was absent the day we did the peer review in class, a peer and myself chose to do the peer review outside of class on our own time. Andrew suggested that I should elaborate a little more on the advertisement itself and the different images that were used in the image. According to him, I should have used less outside information in the process of constructing my paper. He liked how I did incorporate unique facts about the ad itself and how I shed some light on the anti ad and the process the fast food actually undergoes.
Monday, November 19, 2012
Friday, November 16, 2012
Secret
This activity let me talk about a secret which I wouldn't talk to anyone else about because I feel like others would judge me for it, while in the context of this activity people might just get a good laugh out of it. My audience for this is pretty much anyone that is interested in the secret, people that are bored and just want to look at things like this or people who want to get a laugh out of the misfortunes of others. I looked through a magazine at first just to inspire myself and I found an image of an object which relates to my secret. I cut out that specific item, glued it on the card and wrote some words, to be more exact: my secret. My secret gave the item more meaning because it explained the picture I used. Even though this might not be my deepest darkest secret, I believe that the combination of the image and my wording might let people understand what this is about.
This activity let me talk about a secret which I wouldn't talk to anyone else about because I feel like others would judge me for it, while in the context of this activity people might just get a good laugh out of it. My audience for this is pretty much anyone that is interested in the secret, people that are bored and just want to look at things like this or people who want to get a laugh out of the misfortunes of others. I looked through a magazine at first just to inspire myself and I found an image of an object which relates to my secret. I cut out that specific item, glued it on the card and wrote some words, to be more exact: my secret. My secret gave the item more meaning because it explained the picture I used. Even though this might not be my deepest darkest secret, I believe that the combination of the image and my wording might let people understand what this is about.
Wednesday, November 14, 2012
Class Blog 11/14/12
Class Blog
During class today Ms. Lang handed back our first drafts of paper #3 about the anti ad that we were supposed to create. She gave us some time to look over the corrections and comments that she made before we proceeded to talk about other class-related issues. Also, Ms. Lang told us when all the revisions of paper one, two and three would be due.Revisions:
Paper 1 - Wednesday 11/21/12
Paper 2 - Friday 11/30/12
Paper 3 - no revision option
Ms. Lang went over some common problems she found in our drafts of paper #3. The main issues were the fact that a lot of students claimed that "people think they become famous if they use the product" and the students' inability to use internal citations.
How to cite something in the text:
-book or magazine: if it is just one sentence: (last name of author, pg#)
if it is a whole paraphrased paragraph: (last name)
-website: (last name)
Some important things that we should include in our papers are our audiences and where our ad originally came from. That information is essential to construct our papers. 1/3 of our paper should focus on how we constructed and modified this ad for a specific audience. Because some students are not too great with computers, we may construct our ads without the use of any computer graphics.
After we talked about the paper, we discussed the reading on page 192. The main focus of that reading was about perspectives about other people without knowing their background or context.
Ms. Lang wrote down the following things on the board:
-perspective of the other person
-how do you know?
-stereotypes of black men
-shock/curiosity
-fear
-understanding stereotype
-ashamed
-take precautions
How the reading was constructed:
-naive tone
-distinct voice: since he incorporates his background into his present experiences, he gives it a very personal touch
-genuine/honest
-reflective
What affects the public sphere:
-teachers
-figures of authority
-people who stand out/ people that don't stick to the norms of our society
We will have an option to publish our anti ads!
We will create magazines with our ads in them with ads with similar audiences.
FOR FRIDAY: BRING A PAIR OF SCISSORS AND A MAGAZINE
Wednesday, October 31, 2012
Nike Maxim
In the advertisement, there is an original yellow and purple Nike soccer ball which is used in the Barclay's Premiere League these days. It is called Nike Maxim and according to the advertisement it is "The World's Best Ball." The fact that this ball is used in the Premiere League appeals to the audience's ethos, because if professional soccer players use this kind of soccer ball, it must be high quality and one of the best products on the market. Naturally, that is debatable since that is a matter of opinion. This specific ad is trying to sell a $150 soccer ball to athletes that play soccer. The target audience is probably men between the age of 15 and 35, considering this is a pretty expensive ball. The background is a dark shade of gray, which reflects even more masculinity. The ball is also somewhat wet. That is probably supposed to inform the audience that even if it is raining the player has a pretty good grip on the ball while shooting. This image invites me to believe that if I buy an expensive soccer ball such as this, I might be able to achieve the same skill level as some of the professional soccer players and that I might become better.
In the advertisement, there is an original yellow and purple Nike soccer ball which is used in the Barclay's Premiere League these days. It is called Nike Maxim and according to the advertisement it is "The World's Best Ball." The fact that this ball is used in the Premiere League appeals to the audience's ethos, because if professional soccer players use this kind of soccer ball, it must be high quality and one of the best products on the market. Naturally, that is debatable since that is a matter of opinion. This specific ad is trying to sell a $150 soccer ball to athletes that play soccer. The target audience is probably men between the age of 15 and 35, considering this is a pretty expensive ball. The background is a dark shade of gray, which reflects even more masculinity. The ball is also somewhat wet. That is probably supposed to inform the audience that even if it is raining the player has a pretty good grip on the ball while shooting. This image invites me to believe that if I buy an expensive soccer ball such as this, I might be able to achieve the same skill level as some of the professional soccer players and that I might become better.
Monday, October 29, 2012
Corrupt Politics
I never really knew much about politics, since I never really cared about it. When my family and I moved to the United States from Germany though, all that changed. I started to educate myself about the hierarchy of authority in this country and learned about leading figures such as the president or the vice president of the United States, as well as the general facts about political parties and their main beliefs. Because the outcome of the next presidential election will play a huge rule in my parents' acquisition of the green card in the near future, I figured that voting for Romney will give them the best shot of getting the green card within the next two years.
I never really knew much about politics, since I never really cared about it. When my family and I moved to the United States from Germany though, all that changed. I started to educate myself about the hierarchy of authority in this country and learned about leading figures such as the president or the vice president of the United States, as well as the general facts about political parties and their main beliefs. Because the outcome of the next presidential election will play a huge rule in my parents' acquisition of the green card in the near future, I figured that voting for Romney will give them the best shot of getting the green card within the next two years.
Throughout the past few
weeks numerous college students have approached me and asked me whether I have
registered to vote. Since I deeply care about the outcome of the next
presidential election, I had gone through the lengthy process of registering
quite some time ago. Naturally, I had watched all the presidential and vice presidential
debates in order to accurately inform myself of the available options and which
would benefit me the most. Since my dad had gotten my brother and myself the
green card a few years back due to our backgrounds, his connections and the
investments he had made in this country. Now, my brother and I are able to vote
in this country but our parents who made it possible for us to live here merely
have visas in order to maintain their residency in the United States.
Because my family now lives
in Naples, I had to order an absentee ballot, which I received in the mail
about a week ago. That document made it able for me to vote even though I
registered to vote in Naples. I voted for Mitt Romney, because his policies on
immigration will make it possible for my parents to get the green card in the
upcoming year. Naturally, my brother wanted to show his appreciation for his
parents as well and therefore he voted for Romney as well.
I find it disturbing that my
parents who made it possible for my brother and myself to become citizens of
this country don’t even have a green cared yet, to wait at least five more
years to become citizens of this great nation and on the other hand, hundreds
of illegal immigrants make their way into this country every day and make it so
much harder for those who try to migrate to this country legally. Those illegal
immigrants take jobs away from Americans who worked hard all of their lives in
order to attain the social status they have now.
Wednesday, October 17, 2012
Paper 2
After reviewing the comments and highlighted portions of my paper, I was pleased to see that about half my paper was highlighted. For the next draft I will include the orgin of the poster and an analysis of the facial expressions of the two candidates. Even though the use of "vs" is not too relevant in the overall image in my opinion, it is quite possible that I will include it in my next draft. Even though I did not state a specific audience of the image, it is apparent that the audience of this image are republicans and independants who are unsure of casting their vote in the upcoming election. Even though one of the suggestions is to rely more on the image rather than my outside knowledge of politics, it is rather difficult to fill 7 pages by explaining to colors, two words and two faces and their meaning in the context of each other.
After reviewing the comments and highlighted portions of my paper, I was pleased to see that about half my paper was highlighted. For the next draft I will include the orgin of the poster and an analysis of the facial expressions of the two candidates. Even though the use of "vs" is not too relevant in the overall image in my opinion, it is quite possible that I will include it in my next draft. Even though I did not state a specific audience of the image, it is apparent that the audience of this image are republicans and independants who are unsure of casting their vote in the upcoming election. Even though one of the suggestions is to rely more on the image rather than my outside knowledge of politics, it is rather difficult to fill 7 pages by explaining to colors, two words and two faces and their meaning in the context of each other.
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